Here is something I have been working on. Most of this is a combo of things I remember, things that were revealed to me later on and the imagination of my mind.
Please let me know what you think, be honest! I am freely asking you to judge me.
Violet was her name
Violet was a shy, slightly average looking (so she said), church going girl.
The milk boy Edward was always smiling and making her laugh.
He was very witty and the jokes just flowed from him.
She was thrilled to see him everyday.
She would time her day around the delivery of the milk.
She knew he was the one she would marry.
They finally got married and she moved with him to the dairy farm.
She knew a little about cows, but learned quickly the process of having a business.
Business was good; there was the dairy side of it and also the farming side.
They raised cows and grew large corn fields.
They worked very hard, from sunrise to sunset.
Violet was also the common housewife.
She cooked, canned, tended her garden and cleaned the house.
She washed the clothes by hand in the kitchen sink.
They wasted no time in starting their family.
It’s a boy!
Violet was very happy to give her husband a strong son to help on the farm.
It’s a girl!
Their family was shaping up nicely!
It is starting to get harder for her to help out on the farm, with having two kids to manage plus her daily responsibilities.
Edward has to hire more help; he employs the local high schoolers on summer break.
It’s another boy and another boy soon after!
She loves her life on the farm and can’t ever imagine leaving.
Many years pass and their two oldest children have left the nest.
The boy went on to serve his country.
The girl got married and had the first grandchild. The marriage did not work out. Their son in law got custody.
Violet and Edward felt very fortunate to still have their grandchild in their lives.
With just two sons left at home, things were different.
Business had gone down.
The larger dairies are getting more progressed and getting a large amount of the contracts.
It was one of the hardest choices they have ever had to make, but it was time to sell the farm.
Before this could be done, they had to find a new place to go.
By this time Edward had saved a good penny and decided to build his wife the house of her dreams.
Within reason, of course.
He found a beautiful piece of property just outside of town.
He made sure the new house had all the amenities his wife had always talked about.
She would have a sewing room.
She would have a wheeled clothes line.
She would have a large picture window in the living room that looked out on the river.
The remaining two boys will both have their very own rooms.
Even with having to lose her lifestyle at the farm, which she was very sad about.
She felt like they were moving up in the world.
She was proud to have Edward as her husband.
12 comments:
I really got pulled into this story Heather. What's it based on??
I like it! I wasn't sure where it was going at first, but it's a good piece of writing.
I'm going to guess by the tags that it's about your grandparents? I would love to hear more of the story!
♥Spot
Oh, it sounds like a song! So pretty.
I think this story is about life, Maybe grandparents but that story would fit many people. My Day to Day started out about my childhood on up and it was truly amazing what I remembered. I like the story Heather. More please.
Oh...this story was so sweet! I was worried for a while there that something bad was gonna happen....was sub-consciously holding my breath. I like stories with happy endings!
This is such a sweet story. What is it based on? Is there more? I totally want to know if she likes the house.
Loved these snipets, sounds like the makings of a beautiful novel...more please! :)
Mindy
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Maureen...So glad you liked it. It is based on my maternal grandparents.
Tink...Thanks, I was afraid yall would find it too choppy.
Spot...I guess I need to get out my thinking cap again and write some more.
Rockygrace...A song? Interesting. Thanks.
Lucy...Thanks. Yes it is about the every day life stuff. I'm going to have to write more.
Kathryn...Thanks! I tried to write it with grammies character in mind. She was never one to reveal or dwell on the bad stuff. I like happy endings too.
Elle...Thanks! My grandparents. No there isn't any more just yet.
Mindy...I was thinking that but would have to have someone better than me to write it.
OK Heather here is my Judgement:
You Did Good!!!!!
I really liked what I read and could feel both the joys and hardships all in a short space, I look forward to more of the story later on.
I really hate to admit it, but sometimes writing less is so much better. You proved it. I need to pay attention and learn from you.
(Pssst,,,what is was Networked Blog?)
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